*nervously raises hand* I understood that Seto was ambushing Izuna. You wrote a lovely Tobirama using Hiraishin to gtfo. Which means Seto had to be in the office before anyone knew Tobirama had stumbled his way into the Run (I'd be terrified if anyone could predict Tobi's escape and destination and still be fast enough to ambush him, but Seto also came across badass, so it could be theoretically plausible?). So obviously Seto was focused elsewhere? Same for Hikaku at the labs. I think because your writing made sense, no one commented on it?
I'm really enjoying reading your world building, btw.
I'm so glad it came across and made sense. When I don't state things explicitly, I'm worried I've not given enough information - but the characters often don't think explicitly, or I have the wrong POV to cover stuff so I'm always worried about it 😝
And I'm so glad you're enjoying my world building. It's always nice to hear that someone likes my little stories!
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