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  1. Bless you for writing this story, I loved reading it (and took like two pages of notes on everything I noticed and loved, but I don’t want to bog you down 😅)

    The opening is so sweet and heartbreaking; we know it’s going to end badly for them but they’re obliviously playing their romantic game of cat-and-mouse with each other (they both think they’re the cat).

    The way you play with the time jump is fantastic; mostly not acknowledging it because Kira’s the main pov and like she said, seeing changes happen slowly over a decade gave her time to adjust, but then having jarring moments sprinkled in that make her think about the gap between this and the last time she saw Cretak. It gives a sense of the disorientation Cretak’s presence is causing Kira (being called General, thinking of Molly enrolling in the academy) as well as reminding the reader of when we are and where we came from in the story.

    Also, this might be me riffing, but when Kira insists on walking Cretak to her quarters and gets stared down you wrote that line “Cretak used to do this too, a decade ago” it makes it sound like you’re talking about a third character. I love it. There is absolutely two Cretaks in the story, the Cretak of the past who was Kira’s lover and has, in a sense, died and been mourned (the duranja 🥺), and then this new, older Cretak that Kira needs to establish a whole new relationship with (and a silver fox, no less).

    I think you got Ro down perfectly, I heard her voice in the story, and I like the little details. Like when she shows Kira an unusual amount of deference in front of Cretak- of course Ro wants to make Bajoran protocol look flawless in front of other powers, it’s the little chip on her shoulder that she still carries around. She still has that insubordinate streak (fuck you, Riker) which makes her great as the voice of reason. And Kira seeing parallels in their relationship and hers to Sisko’s- so precious! The torch is passed. (And borhyas- great nod to tng)

    You’ve accomplished so much with this story, but also the running thread of a relationship that gets cut short at the peak of it’s intensity (those first few months, my god) and all the unresolved pain that gets carried around afterwords- then the awkwardness of a reunion, not knowing how or where to pick up again and needing to re-establish boundaries. For a story about two alien powers it’s so grounded and relatable.

    There are a lot more notes, but this has to end somewhere 😅 Thank you ❤️❤️❤️

    (I was imagining Zetha as the warrior nun ❤️)
    (Ro roasting Julian and his darts 👌🏼)
    (Cretak not knowing about Ross’ betrayal and being hurt by it at the hearing- how dare you?!)

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    1. OMG, thank *you* for this comment!! 😭 (and also absolutely don't apologize for having taken NOTES, honestly it's every fic writer's dream!!!)

      they’re obliviously playing their romantic game of cat-and-mouse with each other (they both think they’re the cat)
      this made burst out laughing, it's 100% real!!

      I'm very glad you liked the way I tried to write the time jump! I wanted to describe how much Kira feels on uneven footing with the reality of having Cretak be back, even if Kira has dreamed of a moment like this for years. It's not unlike what happened with Jadzia and Ezri I suppose, but as always Cretak presents a very difficult challenge for Kira. I'm glad you found the story both grounded and relatable.

      I'm also very happy you liked the way I wrote Ro!! I have wanted to try writing her for some time, and this seemed the perfect opportunity to let her and Kira interact. I completely agree with you that Ro has that chip on her shoulder and it wouldn't easily go away, but as you say it was fun to have her be the voice of reason and caution to Kira's moment of impulsiveness (as someone noticed in the comments, she's surprisingly not unlike Odo in this, which was a realization that surprised me as well while I was writing!)

      And YES I'm so glad you were imagining Zetha as the warrior nun— I think she'd fit super well among the Qowat Milat, while also never really forgetting what happened to Cretak. I like to think that she convinced the rest of the order that freeing Cretak was the right thing to do, even if took a decade!

      (Cretak not knowing about Ross’ betrayal and being hurt by it at the hearing- how dare you?!)
      This was something I thought about a lot— I think Cretak may have suspected that something with Ross was amiss after Julian came to her in "Inter Arma Enim Silent Leges" but even then, I think she considered him if not a friend at least a good colleague. I think learning the truth about how things went down would have confirmed her worst suspicions, stuff that has gnawed at her for years. And that, plus the humiliating process of the hearing in itself, it's what makes Cretak snap at Kira :(

      Thank you again so, so much for this comment!! It was lovely to find it in my inbox and it made my day <3 I want to take this opportunity to tell you that your art and your thoughts on Kira/Cretak have been a big inspiration for this fic, so it means a lot to me that you liked it!!

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