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  1. "Fine, but I'll get the next one." He took a deep breath and looked her in the eyes, as seriously as he could muster. "As a date. I want to take you on a date." With a nod, he added, "Feel free to say 'no', but if I haven't made this clear already, I just don't know when to quit, but - "

    "Yes!" Naoto cut in, barely able to breathe. "Yes, I would like to go on a date with you."

     

    I really liked how the asking out was handled -- like adults. Akihiko asked her on a date and was clear abt it, and gave her a comfortable amount of room to say no. And Naoto, as much as she's unequipped to handle more social situations, gives him a straight answer without flustering much.

    I'm really glad you handled it with respect and didn't make the two dance around and blush and stuff that I've unfortunately come to expect from fanfiction. All this following a nice exploration of character development, that's great execution my dude.

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    1. Considering that they're friends have been pushing them to date constantly, it's not like it's a novel concept for them xD

      I like to think that Akihiko's attitude toward dating has changed in his years traveling the world. And I never pegged Naoto someone who could handle/initiate the 'spontaneous kiss to confession'. Glad you enjoyed it!

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