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  1. !!! A Lex story! I can't believe I have a Lex story! I love her so much.

    She'd found it funny, considering how much her grandfather had hated lawyers.

    I love how you capture Hammond here, such a brief bit about him that pulls in all the feeling of Jurassic Park itself.

    With a large sum of what Tim called the dino payoff in her bank account

    Ha. Perfect bit of Tim characterization there.

    Sarah turned and grinned. She was older than the last time Lex had seen her, god, in her fifties now. Her red hair, pulled back in a practical ponytail, shone in the sun, and her arms were tanned and freckled. She wore a button down shirt with the sleeves rolled up to her elbows, khaki shorts, and work boots. Lex felt overdressed in her slacks and blouse, even with the camo print Jurassic World baseball cap on her head.

    This description of Sarah is absolutely perfect, and also sharply drives home how much time has passed, how much they have all changed, and all the ways they haven't.

    "They told me I was uniquely qualified to consult on security," Lex replied as she stepped back.

    "Security?" Sarah repeated. "So, thousand foot cement wall around the entire island with signs that warn people to keep out?"

    HA! This is perfect, both to show Sarah's sense of humor and also as a meta commentary on the terrible idea that is Jurassic World.

    Lex made a face. "Maybe I want to make sure, if they're insisting on doing this, that I've done everything I can for it to be as safe as it could be. What about you?"

    This is such a believable reason for Lex to come back. She wouldn't have been pulled back to the island for money, like Grant was, or to protect the people she loves, like Malcolm was (because the people she loves wouldn't get close), but to try to keep people safe, even if she knows how things fail, especially because she knows how things fail -- that is Lex, all grown up and even more amazing.

    but her laughter faded as two velociraptors strode out of their shelter and into the open space of the pen. The one she and Sarah were only a few feet above. How steady was the catwalk? How fast could she run down the stairs in her flats? How sturdy was the pen?

    The details here are perfect. In just a few words, you captured Lex's fear and passed it to me as a reader; I can remember her terror in Jurassic Park, and how deeply terrifying the raptors can be, even while also being amazing, and all of that mixes here so well.

    "Studying them, working with them. Training them, as much as you can train a wild animal. But they're so intelligent, it's hard not to explore their potential."

    Lex shook her head. "I just can't believe they made more raptors after everything."

    "They were still here, Lex," Sarah said gently. "All of them. They've been here the whole time. Everyone left and they remained."

    I can't even find words to tell you how perfect this is, in all its layers. Lex's fear, Sarah being gentle, the raptors surviving everything -- humans created these genetically engineered monsters, and then left them behind, and still they thrive. Perfect.

    Sarah wrapped her arm around Lex's shoulders and pulled her in close. Lex wasn't a kid anymore, but it still felt good to be heard by someone who understood her, even if Sarah disagreed with her stance on the creatures.

    "Nothing bad is going to happen this time," Sarah said.

    Lex nodded, but she knew all too well that she could take every security measure, and it was still no guarantee.

    Oh, god, this is perfect, and terrifying, and so true to her characterization and to the very concept of Jurassic Park, Jurassic World, the hubris of humanity.

    This story is absolutely wonderful. Thank you, thank you, thank you for writing it for me. I love your Lex and your Sarah, and this is such a believable addition of them to Jurassic World.

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    1. Oh gosh, what wonderful feedback, thank you! I'm so happy you liked it. I may have been toying with this idea for your for a while for various exchanges and it finally happened this time! I'm so glad I could give you this gift. :)

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      1. !!! I am absolutely touched that you are the author. Thank you, thank you, thank you. I loved writing for you last year, and am so thrilled to get this story from you.

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