Oh wow, this is an awesome beginning, you really create a feel for the place and the circumstances. (And yes, I did totally just get here from your comment on 'Opposition'). :)
Thank you so much, I'm glad to hear it's working so far. And hee, I do that all the time. Follow people back to their fic from comments...or find fic from the bookmarks of people who've written or commented on stuff I enjoyed.