Hm. This seems better fleshed out than the last one. Karkat seems like himself, Sollux isn't doing anything unSolluxy. Slick...has a character, but it seems to be Boxcars' (“You should kiss him,” your dad continues. He’s not even fucking listening to you. “In fact, you will kiss that boy. You’re going to kiss the goddamn boy and there will be no arguments. really?) Given that it's not like the stabdad thing is official anything, I don't see why you didn't just say Karkat's being raised by Boxcars instead of trying to use Slick for all this.
And he has actually pulled out his fucking gun and is actually pointing it at you. “Dad! This is a public place! Put that away or they’re going to take you to jail!”
Also, while pointing a gun at him as a threat is both funny and something I can see any of the group thinking was a good way to handle things, I really can't see Karkat trying to argue him down on the basis of jail when he's a criminal who does things that get you put in jail all the time.
Thank you again for reading, however again I feel I should point out these weren't necessarily made for quality reading! I'm glad you enjoyed this one a bit more and I apologise for any characterisation you feel was out of line. Personally I agree with you wholeheartedly, haha. Really though, thanks very much for reading, and I hope you didn't feel like you wasted too much of your time!
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Farla
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