Though, I'm not sure that we ever see Willow try to help someone by manipulating them so directly. I don't believe that she ever means blatant harm. She just gets frustrated and steps over the line. I could see her totally doing that at any point in the series were her mother to forbid her from seeing that Bunny girl ever again. That's where the heart of this tiny story lies.
I prefer the intimacy and immediacy of first person present tense. It really is the best way to convey any emotionally driven story. Third person is best for conveying action. Try to describe a fight scene in first person and you'll totally see what I mean. They're a pain. This is so short that it really didn't matter. I could've gone any which way with the POV and tense and not fallen into any traps. Perhaps I should've written it in third because that is the preferred tense of the masses. I didn't.
Otherwise, I entirely agree with you. This was one of those rare concepts that was honestly just a little bigger than drabble size. I think I had 250 words at one point. I pared it down and made it fit. That worked beyond my expectations.
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Valyssia
Posted Fri 03 Feb 2012 05:16PM EST
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