"She told me," he says, "W-well, she told that fuckin' duplicitous lowblood an' maybe I overheard. Oh god, I'm so pathetic." "Don't make me cut you again," says Jack.
This is perhaps the most perfect summation of their characters to ever exist.
I love how you've written Eridan, he's so terribly pitiable without there being any sense that excuses any of it. And I love the writing itself, which is just beautiful. And Rose's choice of revenge. And Jack, just for being Jack.
My one quibble would be Scratch - this predates him being quite so awful, but he doesn't feel necessary here. It feels like this could easily have played out the same without his intervention, and he's never shown the ability to nudge minds like that. I don't think he's needed for Rose to know what's going on, either - Karkat saw the whole thing and was left alive to tell what happened. And having it be an orchestrated revenge doesn't really add much. Having it be Eridan simply reaping what he sowed seems more fitting.
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Farla
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